Reviewed:
In "Tired of Being the Nice Guy", we have the story of a man that has lived his entire life letting the women in his life run roughshod all over him. After coming to the conclusion that he just isn't happy, our nameless man informs his live-in girlfriend Becky that he wants out. After hearing what kind of girl he wants, Becky asks for 1 month to prove she can be that girl. Read along as our nameless hero deals with the changes both he and Becky undergo.
The sex in this story is a lot of fun. The main character acts out a lot of fantasies in true "new Dominant" fashion. While much of this is pure fantasy written by someone who hadn't yet experienced being a Dom, the author got quite a bit right, and some wrong. Be warned that the "WS" code does involve both golden showers and the drinking of urine. If either of those bother you, you may want to avoid those scenes.
The plot itself was pretty good. The story moved about briskly, and the pacing of the various scenes was good. The author took the time to go through the challenges a submissive goes through when they admit their lifestyle to parents, and it was done well.
Technically, this story started off really shaky, and improved as it went along. Much of the original writing was cleaned up after its initial posting, but there are still many problems in the early and even some middle chapters. 2 people speaking in the same paragraph happened a few times. A person talking to themselves due to the author forgetting who was responding to whom happened a few times, as well. There were very few typos and I don't remember any misspellings jumping out at me. For an author's first work, this was very good.
Overall, I like this story. It's exactly the through process a first time Dominant tends to go through, where practical matters often don't enter into the story. Becky spends a LOT of time "Topping from the bottom", or where the submissive basically controls much of what is going on. While she is sometimes put in her place, Becky is driving the car.
For a first time author who had no practical Dominant experience, the author did a great job. Of all of MWTB's stories, this remains my favorite.
Reviewed:
Now THIS is the way to write a BDSM story. Although not a true BDSM story per se, it's still well written and the appeal to this reviewer, well, just hits the spot.
The author treats the whole story with love and care as well as a definite line of thought that never loses this reader. And the twists to his girlfriend/slave, Becky are just amazing.
I'm not a big BDSM fan and frankly don't like the cruelty that some stories or even some people hand out to their 'slave/lovers' (although I have no objection about being 'in control' of another for the sake of mutual pleasure) Which is how MWTB handles this story. There is no 'cruelty' to it. No terror in the domination.
It's a well written story that I'm sure will get many of you readers off. And as the author submits more of the story, you can tell he's put some real thought into the plot and character development. Great story!!!